05-23-2014, 07:59 AM
(05-23-2014, 07:49 AM)Leanne Wrote: I was enjoying it right up until that awkward last line, which is a shame since the last line should be the most memorable. Because of the odd syntax I'm not entirely sure what you mean to say -- is it something like "and in time I'll be free"?
I would just suggest that you think about a more interesting subject. Good luck, Loretta