Mother's Day Revelation.
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i read circumvention as circumcision ...yes i know, i have issues.

i actually liked the 3rd stanza. it acted like reinforced concrete to what came before it. i was also fine with the syntax.
the last line could have done without [were]
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Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-13-2014, 10:46 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by Brownlie - 05-13-2014, 11:14 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 11:26 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-13-2014, 11:53 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 02:16 PM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-23-2014, 06:28 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by billy - 05-23-2014, 07:55 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-23-2014, 08:44 AM



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