05-23-2014, 05:55 AM
The struggle to come through with poetry in writing about the failure to write poetry isn't working here. What is a poet without words, in the sense you're talking about? A person with an artistic temperament but no ability; I heard that on a tv show.
But you show you have the ability to form a poem. The words are just lackluster in this case. "Fearless in encounters with the existential questions of his own rambling mind, his friend, lover and God." "His highest desire was to dissolve into the collective consciousness of humankind, as a poet using only his words." You're just hovering over the surface, or tip-toeing on a fluffy mattress with this stuff. There are generic signs, "existential questions" and "collective consciousness", and you, or the speaker, are saying there's nothing to be done. And nothing is.
But you show you have the ability to form a poem. The words are just lackluster in this case. "Fearless in encounters with the existential questions of his own rambling mind, his friend, lover and God." "His highest desire was to dissolve into the collective consciousness of humankind, as a poet using only his words." You're just hovering over the surface, or tip-toeing on a fluffy mattress with this stuff. There are generic signs, "existential questions" and "collective consciousness", and you, or the speaker, are saying there's nothing to be done. And nothing is.