Collarbones
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(05-20-2014, 09:49 AM)Markworth Wrote:  Great images. There were only two lines that were distracting for me.

Not purposefully, but not by accident.

In mid-poem I began wondering if this is possible and it became a bit of a riddle. Maybe there is a way to say that it was intentionally on accident.

In the most beautiful.

I was left wondering if it should have way at the end.
You're right, it was supposed to say "way" at the end, it seems I just never got it in I guess

I'm not quite sure how to state that it was an intentional accident
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Collarbones - by Tdurr - 05-20-2014, 04:53 AM
RE: Collarbones - by rowens - 05-20-2014, 05:06 AM
RE: Collarbones - by allthingsworthy - 05-20-2014, 08:48 AM
RE: Collarbones - by Markworth - 05-20-2014, 09:49 AM
RE: Collarbones - by Tdurr - 05-20-2014, 11:35 AM
RE: Collarbones - by Tiger the Lion - 05-21-2014, 11:43 AM



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