05-20-2014, 05:37 AM
Hmmm I feel like this poem is kind of an "insider". I see different subjects but they don't seem to connect to me. What I do like is your word choice. The diction gives the poem a subject of heat and burning(embers, strike of a match, burning, etc.) It's like you got the words up to par with your intrinsic subject, but the sentences and stanzas need some alignment. I also thought that the lines were divided a little awkwardly. But I just would like to see a more clear edit of this. I think it'd be awesome.