Song of Solomon 2:14

[rowens]

I’ve always questioned the old man’s ways
He passed away last month
I’m not sure if I’m sad about it or not
He usually kept to himself
No one really knew the current him

"the current" says something, but it might go too far. Maybe just:
No one really knew him

Only memories of how he was

I felt a little bad for the teenager
He ran away from here last week
He was always worried
He carried burdens on his shoulders

That line is a bit dull.


Most of them were unnecessary
And too much to handle I guess

But the nearly flippant "I guess" makes up for it.


Remember the lady with the broom?
She waved it around to scare you away
She moved out yesterday
She couldn’t see that you were pretty
She thought you would give me a disease

I open the door
It feels different from a window
I see you flying from house to house
Hiding under porches and steps
You seem restless too

Their craziness…
It kept you at a distance
And me;
In my room

But now it’s safe
Come home and I’ll take care of you
Come home and sing to me

That's all I have to say about the poem at the moment.