Acer Aspiration

[ChristopherSea]

Yes, it does help, thanks so much Marcella. I was wondering if that double alliteration blitz would be too much, perhaps eager flies or a cloud of some sort would play out better. I see what you mean about the closing stanza. Some of that was built up to address some one else's concern. Let me see what I can do with it. Cheers/Chris

I have a new edit based on your suggestions. Much obliged.