Am I a Fool

[Brownlie]

This one was from the very first day of NaPM. It may not be ready for work shopping but I figured if I started others would feel more comfortable doing it. Feel free to offer any suggestions at all, everything is up for grabs here.

I suppose you have some sort aphoristic statements (if that's what you want to call them) in the lines "living is the ghost of play" though that seems to suggest a state of dissolution. You also have a similar statement of more abstract terms in "night will always conquer day"

Am I a Fool -- Question mark here perhaps

Am I a fool to see a ghost
in every girl that walks the coast,
as lavender will ghost to grey
and one will turn to none and say,
"am I a fool." -- It's interesting that this has no question mark


This morning will be spent like most -
the endless days of tea and toast -- Maybe an instead of the, statements that generalize about everything seem to detract from the poignancy. I get the Prufrock as well, so I suppose that could relate to the repeated question as a hint of hesitation

and living is the ghost of play
am I a fool?

One will stew or two will roast -
the spirit’s gone without the host -- You might want to play with "the" in this line. This is a very corporeal idea

as night will always conquer day
as ghosts of voices fade away
you call me still so I just may. -- You might want to include a more grandiloquent statement here.
Am I a fool?

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