05-15-2014, 12:04 AM
Chris,
That's a good solution to the problem if I don't like what I have, but I am unconvinced that what is there is not good, but let's look:
She broke her baby’s head off,
I had to put it back on;
does that make me a god?
She is two years old,
and the baby only plastic.
Seems kind of flat to me, artificial even.
I think I will keep the semi-colon at "on". I think the question of "does that make me a god?" is more than rhetorical, and has to be answered. Sorry guys, not convinced yet. Ella says that it is hokey. I don't see it that way, but I'm still open to being convinced.
Thanks for your comments guys,
Dale
That's a good solution to the problem if I don't like what I have, but I am unconvinced that what is there is not good, but let's look:
She broke her baby’s head off,
I had to put it back on;
does that make me a god?
She is two years old,
and the baby only plastic.
Seems kind of flat to me, artificial even.
I think I will keep the semi-colon at "on". I think the question of "does that make me a god?" is more than rhetorical, and has to be answered. Sorry guys, not convinced yet. Ella says that it is hokey. I don't see it that way, but I'm still open to being convinced.
Thanks for your comments guys,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.