Organ planet (explicit)

[nb]

Hi Babeanew!

I'll ditto what everyone else has said about "fuck". It should be used sparingly; oversuse (such as here) kills its effect.

You have some intriguing images

Hot burning coal, air suction chokes.

Wolf chewing on a rock.

but they seem kind of scattershot.

This

Piercing erupt volcano

I get but this

Sprout on old potato

I do not.

One beany umbilical cord, held too tight.

Good luck on the rewrite!

nb