05-14-2014, 12:41 PM
Second stanza:
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b
c
d (I stumbled on this line, noticeable half-rhyme)
"these lonely sounds make lonely dreams" doesn't sit too well with me. I'm not too sure why to be honest. If someone else picks up on it, then you know there's an issue. Otherwise, my bad : P.
b
b
c
d (I stumbled on this line, noticeable half-rhyme)
"these lonely sounds make lonely dreams" doesn't sit too well with me. I'm not too sure why to be honest. If someone else picks up on it, then you know there's an issue. Otherwise, my bad : P.