05-14-2014, 08:33 AM
I Cede You Peace
I cede you peace,
I'll keep my passion.
Let's have a feast,
we'll dress in fashion;
you are peace
(and reason too)
and me, I'm passion
through and through.
I know your heart
a golden gem.
So, surely I will laugh, and
raise up my head
(as you once said)
to make of empty peace
a new facade.
I will;
disturb the peace
in my own fashion.
I cede you peace
in search of passion
This excellent example of workshopping in the Novice thread can be found here. Thank you to Loretta for a terrific attitude towards workshopping, and to all who commented for their supportive and insightful suggestions.
I cede you peace,
I'll keep my passion.
Let's have a feast,
we'll dress in fashion;
you are peace
(and reason too)
and me, I'm passion
through and through.
I know your heart
a golden gem.
So, surely I will laugh, and
raise up my head
(as you once said)
to make of empty peace
a new facade.
I will;
disturb the peace
in my own fashion.
I cede you peace
in search of passion
This excellent example of workshopping in the Novice thread can be found here. Thank you to Loretta for a terrific attitude towards workshopping, and to all who commented for their supportive and insightful suggestions.
It could be worse