She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day)

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She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day)

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05-14-2014, 03:38 AM

Put a semicolon after on and the question mark after god. Go with the 'She is...only plastic' two line transitional stanza.

My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris

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She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 11:19 AM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Brownlie - 05-13-2014, 11:43 AM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 12:33 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Mopkins - 05-13-2014, 01:38 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 02:07 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Mopkins - 05-13-2014, 02:10 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 02:54 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Mopkins - 05-13-2014, 03:15 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 04:22 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Mopkins - 05-13-2014, 04:28 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by ellajam - 05-13-2014, 08:39 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by ChristopherSea - 05-13-2014, 10:03 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 10:06 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by ellajam - 05-13-2014, 11:01 PM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-14-2014, 02:43 AM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by ChristopherSea - 05-14-2014, 03:38 AM

RE: She broke her baby’s head off (4 mutter's day) - by Erthona - 05-15-2014, 12:04 AM

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