05-14-2014, 02:43 AM
The problem is that really doesn't move you from where you were, to where you are going. The "Would it help to know" is a transitional line. The lines you have offered just restate "She is two years old", but it is too jarring to go straight to that, thus the transitional line. Or do you think it sounds OK just to go straight into "She is two years old..." ?
xoxoxo
Dale
xoxoxo
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.