Mother's Day Revelation.
#3
You were not a care,
I was not a bind.
I was your contempt,
you're a child of mine.

trochee trimeter with xaxa rhyme pattern. Like this any better?


dale the editor
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
Reply


Messages In This Thread
Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-13-2014, 10:46 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by Brownlie - 05-13-2014, 11:14 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 11:26 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-13-2014, 11:53 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by Erthona - 05-13-2014, 02:16 PM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-23-2014, 06:28 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by billy - 05-23-2014, 07:55 AM
RE: Mother's Day Revelation. - by newsclippings - 05-23-2014, 08:44 AM



Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)
Do NOT follow this link or you will be banned from the site!