05-12-2014, 11:25 AM
(05-12-2014, 05:24 AM)bbcashdollar Wrote: 98.6, I laughI enjoyed the imagery and descriptiveness of your poem. It was fresh for me (cause I like doing rhyming poems).
your touch is
much warmer
than that
soft slender of your neck
respite in the small of your back
grace of your hand
tuck strawberry & blonde curls
from fiery keen eyes
breath from your lips
the cut of your tongue
how could I help myself
-romantic poetry is way outside my wheelhouse, thoughts suggestions appreciated.
One critique I have though is maybe make the ending more powerful? Just my opinion.
