05-12-2014, 09:04 AM
This poem seems misdiagnosed. Depression? Depression on acid maybe. This line does seem like depression's physical effects:
"Your body parts iron ball and chain you to a gloom-spelled doom."
everything is a tremendous effort, I get that, but the rest...
To me the writer still seem to be searching for a way to describe what is experienced, or maybe this is purely and external view, although there are aspect here that make me think the writer has first hand experience with this. Still, if the title didn't tell me, I would have no idea what this was about.
Dale
"Your body parts iron ball and chain you to a gloom-spelled doom."
everything is a tremendous effort, I get that, but the rest...
To me the writer still seem to be searching for a way to describe what is experienced, or maybe this is purely and external view, although there are aspect here that make me think the writer has first hand experience with this. Still, if the title didn't tell me, I would have no idea what this was about.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.