05-11-2014, 09:57 PM
(05-08-2014, 09:54 PM)benno_422 Wrote: Pipe Dream:I was thrown by this piece. I read "pipe dream", "badlands" (even with no caps), "iron centipede" and immediately thought keystone XL pipeline and heavy crude. I'm not sure if you're in the US, but if so, wider context matters. I think the reader gets the sense of the natural world being undermined, but with anthropomorphisation it's hard to see why or how.
The badlands are split
along the spine of
an anchor cast
so iron centipedes
could chase their
dead frontiers -
they run faster than
their arms can grab.
-
what meekness
remains is hollowed
in the trunk
of a horn blare
bushes fainting in
the mad rush
until everything
could only grow
pretending as if
they dreamed to
be degenerate
skyscrapers.
I like the flow of the piece and the rythem a lot. I think it needs to be boiled way down and focused. Thanks for the read.