05-09-2014, 08:50 AM
"The driver leans hard and heavy
on the horn and shocks
the fool from their stupor,
and they scuttle to safety.
Is it any wonder no one whistles
on their way to work anymore. "
Shouldn't it be "the fool from his stupor, and he scuttles to safety." ?
The last two lines are a nice end to this. Except for the part mentioned, the poem was clear, and I could see in my minds eye what you were describing.
Dale
on the horn and shocks
the fool from their stupor,
and they scuttle to safety.
Is it any wonder no one whistles
on their way to work anymore. "
Shouldn't it be "the fool from his stupor, and he scuttles to safety." ?
The last two lines are a nice end to this. Except for the part mentioned, the poem was clear, and I could see in my minds eye what you were describing.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.