sorry caleb but
And when the animal has left
Remains the intellectual disgrace
reads like jibberish, feel free to repost your poem but please don't attack people who leave you feedback ? mod
as for cuing the reader that a line break occurred; the end of the line does that along with punctuation if used. if no punctuation is used then every line with a cap 1st letter reads as a new sentence which they may not be, this gives a reader a longer pause than needed.
and if you don't wish to use someone's advice that's okay. feedback is generally another person's POV that you don't have to follow. if you want to use inversion then use it, same with cliche but be prepared to have some poeple say it doesn't work for them.
And when the animal has left
Remains the intellectual disgrace
reads like jibberish, feel free to repost your poem but please don't attack people who leave you feedback ? mod
as for cuing the reader that a line break occurred; the end of the line does that along with punctuation if used. if no punctuation is used then every line with a cap 1st letter reads as a new sentence which they may not be, this gives a reader a longer pause than needed.
and if you don't wish to use someone's advice that's okay. feedback is generally another person's POV that you don't have to follow. if you want to use inversion then use it, same with cliche but be prepared to have some poeple say it doesn't work for them.