05-07-2014, 02:04 AM
Mopkins, tomoffing, thanks for your input! The theme is poverty, being too poor to buy any lunch but working with food all day. It's a complete lack of enthusiasm for life after getting stuck in a rut, and never having a social life or doing anything but working and sleeping, because of abject poverty. The only hope and joy left is the glimmer of dreams for the future, where the grass is greener.
The free-verse is intentional, I wanted this piece to lack even meter to enforce the idea of someone who is too depressed to care. I can see how the shift from focusing on real life only when necessary and spending most time in daydreams and idle hope can be confusing.
The free-verse is intentional, I wanted this piece to lack even meter to enforce the idea of someone who is too depressed to care. I can see how the shift from focusing on real life only when necessary and spending most time in daydreams and idle hope can be confusing.
*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line