05-06-2014, 07:53 PM
bb, I like this a lot. The initial reveal before each image are a bit anticlimactic. Have you thought about reversing that? Not a rewrite, but for example purposes (or something like it):
weathered board and nails
suspending line, laundry
above fresh dirt,
a crucifix
clothes pins braced
between fingers and teeth
praising, surrendering,
or hanging wash,
a woman
Also, braced is an unusual choice for the clothes pins, perhaps clutched or grasped might work better. See what you think. Nice work again./Chris
weathered board and nails
suspending line, laundry
above fresh dirt,
a crucifix
clothes pins braced
between fingers and teeth
praising, surrendering,
or hanging wash,
a woman
Also, braced is an unusual choice for the clothes pins, perhaps clutched or grasped might work better. See what you think. Nice work again./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris

