05-06-2014, 09:12 AM
(05-06-2014, 09:04 AM)milo Wrote:(05-06-2014, 08:13 AM)LorettaYoung Wrote:If language gets boring than we have much larger concerns but as for the inversions, what were you hoping to accomplish by including them in this poem?(05-06-2014, 07:49 AM)Erthona Wrote: Milo with agree I, sure for, sense it plenty makes!
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I see your point; you make it sound rather silly; but language can get boring, in it's usual sense, I've read poetry like that; it's just like someone would speak it, but i will really think about it; perhaps there is a better way. Thank you again, Loretta
I think knowledge of death is of great import when considering things; like riding a wild wind; may walking on the moon; but it could have been said without inversion; I was thinking
for death grins your way
from an open doorway
How many here don't like stanza 2? Can't the wind seep through a crack in the window sill? I still like the stanza; what is wrong with it except the coming in the sill?
(05-05-2014, 04:11 AM)Celestina Waters Wrote: The wind is calling me right now and I AM GOING FOR A RIDE. Before reading this well well written poem I was going to use the wind as an excuse not to venture out. I honestly don't know what verse is my favorite. Each reaches deeper, urging the reader to feel the wind as never before. The last stanza made me shiver, and not because I was cold. What a great way to begin your journey here. I encourage you to continue, as I will be looking forward to the new elements you bring to life.
(05-05-2014, 04:11 AM)Celestina Waters Wrote: The wind is calling me right now and I AM GOING FOR A RIDE. Before reading this well well written poem I was going to use the wind as an excuse not to venture out. I honestly don't know what verse is my favorite. Each reaches deeper, urging the reader to feel the wind as never before. The last stanza made me shiver, and not because I was cold. What a great way to begin your journey here. I encourage you to continue, as I will be looking forward to the new elements you bring to life.Celestina: Thank you so much; did i already? This site is amazing; how willing you all are to be helpful and reply to questions. I'm so glad you liked it; you know there's really a more important thread here than the wind; it's our choices; what we reap, what we can see; what we can feel, in a way, the wild wind is really a metaphor for open doors in our lives. Thanks again, Loretta