05-03-2014, 01:37 PM
(05-03-2014, 08:36 AM)Caleb Murdock Wrote: This is certainly a different take on old age than my take.Good point, i got caught in the "ing"s. I think like that and this was a quickie.
I notice that the first stanza doesn't have a verb. Perhaps it is just a preference of mine, but I can relate much better to poems that have good "sentencing", as Frost called it.
(05-03-2014, 09:12 AM)milo Wrote:(05-03-2014, 08:36 AM)Caleb Murdock Wrote: This is certainly a different take on old age than my take.The verb is "comes".
I notice that the first stanza doesn't have a verb. Perhaps it is just a preference of mine, but I can relate much better to poems that have good "sentencing", as Frost called it.
Good point, this was a quickie. 
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