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05-03-2014, 09:12 AM

(05-03-2014, 08:36 AM)Caleb Murdock Wrote: This is certainly a different take on old age than my take.

I notice that the first stanza doesn't have a verb. Perhaps it is just a preference of mine, but I can relate much better to poems that have good "sentencing", as Frost called it.

The verb is "comes".

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Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-02-2014, 02:34 AM

RE: Old Love - by Erthona - 05-02-2014, 02:45 AM

RE: Old Love - by ellajam - 05-02-2014, 02:52 AM

RE: Old Love - by 71degrees - 05-02-2014, 11:14 AM

RE: Old Love - by tomoffing - 05-02-2014, 11:58 AM

RE: Old Love - by ellajam - 05-02-2014, 01:31 PM

RE: Old Love - by Erthona - 05-02-2014, 03:03 PM

RE: Old Love - by ellajam - 05-02-2014, 06:29 PM

RE: Old Love - by Erthona - 05-03-2014, 02:07 AM

RE: Old Love - by Caleb Murdock - 05-03-2014, 08:36 AM

RE: Old Love - by milo - 05-03-2014, 09:12 AM

RE: Old Love - by ellajam - 05-03-2014, 01:37 PM

RE: Old Love - by Caleb Murdock - 05-03-2014, 01:52 PM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-29-2014, 09:22 PM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ChristopherSea - 05-30-2014, 02:29 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-30-2014, 03:11 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by Brownlie - 05-30-2014, 07:29 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-30-2014, 07:49 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by billy - 05-30-2014, 11:06 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-30-2014, 11:17 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by LorettaYoung - 05-30-2014, 11:19 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-30-2014, 11:36 AM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by LorettaYoung - 05-30-2014, 12:12 PM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by 71degrees - 05-30-2014, 10:46 PM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by ellajam - 05-30-2014, 11:48 PM

RE: Old Love (edit #1) - by LorettaYoung - 05-31-2014, 12:22 AM

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