Young Folks in Love

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71D

Outside of some odd line breaks, such as breaking "crowded | sidewalks", I didn't have many problems with this. I could feel the end coming halfway through, but then again I'm a cynic. I might consider doing away with "at once" in S3 L1. Maybe if anything use "instantly". Maybe a period after "halves". Sort of an odd word to end on, but not really a problem for me.

Best,

Dale

"...then again I'm a cynic..." Aren't we all? Thanks, glad there weren't many problems for you.