Frankenstein’s Mistress

[ChristopherSea]

I have never heard it used in a poem or outside of the horror classic.
--that doesn't make it not cliched!

That said, it really isn't material. I think you've got a great poem kicking around here, and now that I've looked at it through the micro, here's how I think you *might* maybe get there:

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(1) I think the poem should be scary. That means someone dies or is mutilated.
(2) I think the "trust" theme should involve its companions: betrayal and faith.
(3) I absolutely, 100%, and without doubt think you should excise all references to Frankenstein. That reference might've been a good, writerly jumping off point , but it does nothing for you now, except to import a kind of Nickelodeon attitude to what I otherwise read as a sincere piece of writing.
(4) The curve vs. the line is the best image
-so-
(5) Whatever you do with this piece, aim for it to be twice as good. I think it can be

Well, I'll think about it, but I love the metaphorical theme of that Gothic classic. Moreover, it was the title and punchline that inspired everything in between. I think if I abandoned those, I would just trash the whole poem. The feme fatale is a favorite theme of mine and I can't get the idea of a Frankenstein/Monster flavored one out of my head. I can also do another. Much obliged for your input.