Frankenstein’s Mistress

[tectak]

Frankenstein’s Mistress

Trust was your first victim,
knifed on an evening stroll.
A single thrust to the kidney
induced instant shock
before the fool was lost
to us forever. Though I like the struggle to prise in a metaphor , I cannot help but feel that though you won the battle, the victory was pyrrhic..."Trust has no kidney" could be a great poem.

My suspicions first arose
when we drove into town.
The men would incessantly stare
at you from beneath
their automaton masks,
through berserker eyes. I have only heard/seen "berserker" used once before when an outraged East Ender described a shoplifter (allegedly) as wearing a "berserker". Apt...but better used here, though I am having trouble visualising how one stares from "beneath" a mask. To be candid, I do not know what an automaton mask is.

From your smirks, I surmised
that they too gulped down Why "too". Why not "...they, too, gulped..." But again, why "too".
your contagious cocktails
of honeydew words,
your toxic desserts served
in thin glazed lines, For breath, if nothing else, a semicolon here
all the while knowing your body
was all curves,
your nature contoured. A grudging yes to this though l am only grasping at thin glazed lines...and if you know what I mean by that, well...you know what I mean

I imbibed, but was not infected. Stranger and stranger. Though infection just works with imbibment they are not easy bedfellows...help. It is obscure.
Parasitism failed to find foothold,
my adaptive immunity
victorious. I shall continue I am now confused. Imbib-think poison. Infection-think contagion. Parasitism-think infestation. Immunity-think virus. Where are we heading?
to endure, while you must flee
to find a new host.

Better pack your bags quickly
darling, angry villagers
with torches and pitchforks
are coming up the drive. This is an irritating piece because it works in spite of me. Others will be more astute. I give in gracefully.

Hi chris,
as you know, obscure doesn't sit well with me...but I do not criticise the piece on my failings. I do suggest, though, that you open this up more. I feel that crucial elements are missing which would, if extrapolated, do more good than harm.
Best,
tectak