Alone

[Thoughtjotter]

Alone

Tired Fog, Secluded Mist
Droning heft of dreary dusk descends,
Stars are shrouded, lights are black
    Dark, Heavy, Dull
Closed Doors, Closed Room, Closed House
Dark winter’s weight falls upon an empty home
Lilting pianos wander the halls
    Deserted, Hollow, Cold
Crumpled Trash, Clouds of Dust
by the sharp winds, by the cold rains
Distant grey blocks the sky, cloaks the moon
    Detached, Distant, Alone

Well, You have certainly detailed, (to the extreme) an imagery of the gloom and doom of "Alone" but it ends there.There is nothing else.
I believe you could probably benefit from reading and studying other poets not to mention all the very helpful training opportunities available on this site( as we all could, myself most certainly)
You CAN do it,
R.T.

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Alone

Tired Fog, Secluded Mist
Droning heft of dreary dusk descends,
Stars are shrouded, lights are black
    Dark, Heavy, Dull
Closed Doors, Closed Room, Closed House
Dark winter’s weight falls upon an empty home
Lilting pianos wander the halls
    Deserted, Hollow, Cold
Crumpled Trash, Clouds of Dust
by the sharp winds, by the cold rains
Distant grey blocks the sky, cloaks the moon
    Detached, Distant, Alone

Well, You have certainly detailed, (to the extreme) an imagery of the gloom and doom of "Alone" but it ends there.There is nothing else.
I believe you could probably benefit from reading and studying other poets not to mention all the very helpful training opportunities available on this site( as we all could, myself most certainly)