HMS Metaphor Edit 1.1ellajam,crow

[tectak]

Tectak--

Your defensive remarks are well-earned, and you're right. So:

"The piece is tongue in cheek...my avatar."

I knew that'd wrench my edit, but I wanted to edit yours as a straight-piece, thinking that'd be most-helpful.

As to the semi's, I don't have a dog in the fight, except they stylize the poem. If you like them, keep them!

Best of luck,

crow.

Hi crow,
It's not over 'til it's over...I will still correct to your comma suggestions as I can see your logic showing. Credit.
Best,
tectak