Alone

[ChristopherSea]

I like some of the imagery herein, but the heavy-handed use of alliteration and capitalization may overwhelm this little poem. There is a weighted clunky feeling associated with your loneliness that is effective. However, being composed primarily of weather and atmospheric conditions there is little concrete motivation reflecting the title. Lilting pianos was a sharp contrast to the heavy weather, but perhaps by choosing a different adjective you can get the elephantine instruments to help to develop your mood. Their wandering about the house is the most interesting image in the piece, but is not developed. See what you think. Good luck with your next edit./Chris