God is Dead

[milo]

I think the antiquity of the statement is wonderful, actually: a splash of irony against the future-looking line before it. The poem doesn't need any changing, or any additions: it has a good rhythm and the word choice is strong, plus the terseness makes it all the more forceful in presenting its point. What it needs is a reply.

How about critiquing the poem and not the critiques RiverRot.

Doesn't that part somewhat count as a critique of the poem? Like an alternate interpretation of the poem's wording or something?

No it does not. If you read the forum rules you will see where it says that all posts in the critical forums should focus on the original post - the poem. From time to time a discussion may arise about specific techniques but these should take place in the discussion forums so as not to distract from the poem.

/ mod