04-28-2014, 02:17 PM
Marianne,
Stanzas composed of 5 lines, first four in iambic tetrameter, last line in iambic trimeter. It seems to hold this form well throughout the poem. This seems more a practice of form rather than being content driven, as it pretty much explores the subject of "Me and MY Shadow" to the limit, of known knowledge, rather than introducing anything novel or original. The closes would be
"I think to stand out in the sun
and make another me is fun!
I’ll make him male, I’ll make him sweet,
I shall hover round his feet
and he shall have no other!"
Still it is more a variation on a theme than anything fresh.
Overall, in terms of form it is well constructed, ut lacks depth in subject matter.
Dale
Stanzas composed of 5 lines, first four in iambic tetrameter, last line in iambic trimeter. It seems to hold this form well throughout the poem. This seems more a practice of form rather than being content driven, as it pretty much explores the subject of "Me and MY Shadow" to the limit, of known knowledge, rather than introducing anything novel or original. The closes would be
"I think to stand out in the sun
and make another me is fun!
I’ll make him male, I’ll make him sweet,
I shall hover round his feet
and he shall have no other!"
Still it is more a variation on a theme than anything fresh.
Overall, in terms of form it is well constructed, ut lacks depth in subject matter.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.