Brain Wash

[AnywherebutHere]

This is something I very recently written, and hopefully it's better than my previous works. While writing this I considered all the advice I've been given on my previous posts, so this should be more pleasing to read. However, I do believe there is much room to improve (ending seems weak to me, for instance) so here it is:

Brain Wash (not sure about the title)

blaring car horns This first line is already confusing me as blaring car horns are "blinding you", how so? perhaps you can try to get more creative and let the reader visually see the car horns, instead of trying to imagine what car horns visually would look like
blind my eyes so
I only feel the rush
of a monumental sound
like a train would
as I'm bounded to the tracks
obscuring my senses

I sit with an audience
and lights dimmed low
consoling music hums
sweeping my thought Now I am more confused as you jump from this imagery of car horns to sitting on stage, and now there is music. So you see the car horns, but you are hearing the music, it just doesn't click
a Speaker now persistent
from the hierarchical stage
“we are united, believe
in me I have the power” Persistent is not a word I would use there, I wish I could give you one but I am confused as to what you are trying to say

no more blinding horns
to take my sight
now I awake with law
binding only life I still do not understand why blinding horns are taking your sight, or how that is possible. The last line also makes no sense to me. Maybe I am missing the big picture.

I feel as though poetry can be many things, but it is vital that a poem either draws pictures with words to create feelings, or tells a story. This does neither for me. I think you can do much better with your descriptions, and making it all flow together so I can understand what it is you are trying to say, because I have no clue.