Ode to Caffeine

[shenaz]

Hard to describe why, but this poem is extremely lively to me when read aloud, probably because the repetition carries the reader quickly through each stanza.

Your temporal movements are a bit strange to me though.
The beginning of the day/caffeine journey - "Faithful by morn, faithful by noon" - goes directly into what seems to be a sleeplessness (?) - "Curbing my dreams", though the choice of "dream" instead of "sleep" makes me doubt if I've understood you properly. That line intrigues me, but I don't really understand it or its significance, and it feels incongruous with the flow and feel of your poem.

The line"curbing my dreams" is trying to express the fact that when i sleep under the influence of caffeine, it is always dreamless. Definitely opposite what should be possible . Lool

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Hard to describe why, but this poem is extremely lively to me when read aloud, probably because the repetition carries the reader quickly through each stanza.

Your temporal movements are a bit strange to me though.
The beginning of the day/caffeine journey - "Faithful by morn, faithful by noon" - goes directly into what seems to be a sleeplessness (?) - "Curbing my dreams", though the choice of "dream" instead of "sleep" makes me doubt if I've understood you properly. That line intrigues me, but I don't really understand it or its significance, and it feels incongruous with the flow and feel of your poem.

"Curbing my dreams is a description of my dreamless sleep after the caffeine wears off

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Thanks friends. Will improve on my technique. Thats where i seem to have the most problem