Monthly Haiku

[painter not a poet]

achy crimson cramps
my vagina hates me now
womanhood is hard

This was just for fun? But as always critiques are welcome!

Hi, I won't be too serious with my critique seeing as though you said it was just for fun.
"Crimson" is too tame and polite and I would suggest making the first line as brutally honest and straightforward as the second one.
I'm guessing that you weren't going for a double-entendre in the last line but "wo- manhood is hard" sticks out like a errrmm "hard manhood".
It's not strictly a haiku, and I feel that because you stayed with the 5-7-5 format (which isn't really necessary in haiku) your poem suffered slightly, whereas if you had wrote a short poem on the same subject I feel that the freedom from the restrictions of 5-7-5 would help.
Ooopss, did I say I wouldn't be to serious with my critique, sorry if I've gone a bit too far.
As compensation here is an anagram I saw a while ago that is relevant to your post...
The menstrual cycle - My c*nt creates hell

Mark

Wow, Thank you guys for the critiques!

Mark, I think you are right about the 5-7-5 format, it was harder that it seems. I actually thought about, and start out with a short poem, but I felt it was too Vagina Monologue-esque. I don't think you were too serious, I don't take things hard. Thank you again! Glad you all enjoyed its humor.