God is Dead

God is Dead

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04-23-2014, 07:59 PM

'nought but' is a bit awkward and archaic. 'is here' comes off silly and contrived for the rhyme. Perhaps you could work at pairing 'god is dead' with 'chance survives' into your closing.

My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris

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God is Dead - by Am I A Poet? - 04-19-2014, 11:19 AM

RE: God is Dead - by Erthona - 04-19-2014, 11:35 AM

RE: God is Dead - by AnywherebutHere - 04-20-2014, 12:38 PM

RE: God is Dead - by alatos - 04-20-2014, 11:48 PM

RE: God is Dead - by Nbafan - 04-23-2014, 05:43 AM

RE: God is Dead - by Erthona - 04-23-2014, 01:24 PM

RE: God is Dead - by ChristopherSea - 04-23-2014, 07:59 PM

RE: God is Dead - by RiverNotch - 04-28-2014, 09:56 PM

RE: God is Dead - by ChristopherSea - 04-28-2014, 10:06 PM

RE: God is Dead - by RiverNotch - 04-28-2014, 10:27 PM

RE: God is Dead - by milo - 04-28-2014, 10:34 PM

RE: God is Dead - by ChristopherSea - 04-28-2014, 10:55 PM

RE: God is Dead - by rowens - 04-24-2014, 12:37 AM

RE: God is Dead - by Willpark - 04-28-2014, 11:26 AM

RE: God is Dead - by RiverNotch - 04-28-2014, 10:39 PM

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