By the Rim of My Shadow 2

[ChristopherSea]

Hello Gena and welcome. It is a good idea and highly recommended that when work-shopping a poem, you post the revisions above the original for comparison and contrast. Rim of a shadow is an intriguing boundary. I like the imagery herein, but it is unclear how they relate. The sparrow jail-keeper/drunk wicked dead earth/Caesar's bones/bitter taste calling, etc. The original may clear up this progression, I don't know.../Chris