04-21-2014, 07:54 AM
I'm fond of the use of stark color to describe things,i.e., "red rivulets", "blue veins", "white strokes", "black sky" and "black bird".
In Stanza V, L10 do you mean to write the noun "fledgling", instead of "fledging" which is a verb? I do believe fledgling would fit nicely.
Nice piece overall, and good luck completing that otherwise unfinished stanza.
TS
In Stanza V, L10 do you mean to write the noun "fledgling", instead of "fledging" which is a verb? I do believe fledgling would fit nicely.
Nice piece overall, and good luck completing that otherwise unfinished stanza.
TS