04-21-2014, 06:49 AM
Todd, let me take a shot at rehearsing just the narrative, here.
Six Months in 1995
We’d become infected
with the brightness of the moon–
--this is an idea of lunacy, of menstruation, of sex, and if danger
the rasp of our own breathing;
--sex and a reference to illness, stress, fatigue, weakness
days that pressed too close,
--claustrophobia, no breathing room, heightened arousal, stress
flash burns on walls, etched
radioactive hieroglyphs
--doctors office, x-rays, mystery, distance, things that require interpretation
of a pregnant girlfriend,
--concrete image, distancing frame, false attempt at depersonalization
dominatrix with a bread knife,
--cruelty, domination contrasted with domesticity
itchy-faced bouncer with teeth
--probably the narrator's own face
that wouldn’t brush clean,
--guilt
red-dressed addict in frayed
fishnets, covered with drywall
--metaphoric prostitution contrasts w another idea of domesticity: the abode, or domicile; bloodshot eyes
vomit in the walk-in-closet.
--hiding, disgust, loneliness, alcoholism
Glasses clinked and shattered
into lines that crawled up noses burning
inexorable fuses.
--addiction, fear, fragility, a ruined toast, pensiveness, expectation, probably a fear of being "sniffed out"/discovered; possibly a dangerous attempt at unsupervised abortion
Arms and legs splayed forever
exploded over rust-stained shag.
--the rust is blood, this is a horrifying miscarriage or abortion
None of us were there.
--the mother died
None of us saw anything.
--again the idea of ridding oneself of guilt, culpability
Something died.
--the baby/fetus, the relationship, happiness
Someone died.
--the narrator metaphorically, the victim actually
We all should have died.
--regret, anxiety, guilt
Hope that helps!
Six Months in 1995
We’d become infected
with the brightness of the moon–
--this is an idea of lunacy, of menstruation, of sex, and if danger
the rasp of our own breathing;
--sex and a reference to illness, stress, fatigue, weakness
days that pressed too close,
--claustrophobia, no breathing room, heightened arousal, stress
flash burns on walls, etched
radioactive hieroglyphs
--doctors office, x-rays, mystery, distance, things that require interpretation
of a pregnant girlfriend,
--concrete image, distancing frame, false attempt at depersonalization
dominatrix with a bread knife,
--cruelty, domination contrasted with domesticity
itchy-faced bouncer with teeth
--probably the narrator's own face
that wouldn’t brush clean,
--guilt
red-dressed addict in frayed
fishnets, covered with drywall
--metaphoric prostitution contrasts w another idea of domesticity: the abode, or domicile; bloodshot eyes
vomit in the walk-in-closet.
--hiding, disgust, loneliness, alcoholism
Glasses clinked and shattered
into lines that crawled up noses burning
inexorable fuses.
--addiction, fear, fragility, a ruined toast, pensiveness, expectation, probably a fear of being "sniffed out"/discovered; possibly a dangerous attempt at unsupervised abortion
Arms and legs splayed forever
exploded over rust-stained shag.
--the rust is blood, this is a horrifying miscarriage or abortion
None of us were there.
--the mother died
None of us saw anything.
--again the idea of ridding oneself of guilt, culpability
Something died.
--the baby/fetus, the relationship, happiness
Someone died.
--the narrator metaphorically, the victim actually
We all should have died.
--regret, anxiety, guilt
Hope that helps!

