Of Whippoorwills and the Truth
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I think your description could be better throughout, there are no solid or strong details sticking out to me. "warm Southern nights, as the Whippoorwill continues
to remind me who he is," you can add "of" between me and his, and I personally do not like the very ending line where you use over and over again.
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Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by Thoughtjotter - 04-16-2014, 12:17 PM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by Wjames - 04-16-2014, 01:32 PM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by tectak - 04-16-2014, 03:44 PM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by tectak - 04-17-2014, 07:05 AM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by JakMak - 04-16-2014, 04:59 PM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by poe - 04-20-2014, 01:01 AM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by AnywherebutHere - 04-20-2014, 12:20 PM
RE: Of Whippoorwills and the Truth - by aerickson - 04-26-2014, 05:39 AM



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