Waiting

[billy]

keep up the good work, remebering it's less about doing one for one re feedback and more about doing what you can even if that is sometimes two or three to one :J:

The days are long
but then time slips
between two pale sheets
and nothing seems to bud.

A sigh tumbles out like a lazy butterfly.
Rainy days have drawn themselves around me
like wet stockings.
And I wait, as if counting down the days with chalk
on a cement wall.

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Now that you've received such excellent feedback on your poem, it's time to give some back -- in fact, it really should be done the other way around/ admin

On the double. Actually I did critique a poem first.