Waiting

[RSaba]

I love short pieces that say a lot. This is no exception. The edits suggested here are mostly grammatical, punctuation, etc. that might make it read better. Also, I don't know if you meant for it to be double-spaced or not, but that makes it a bit difficult to read. Try it without the spaces!

The days are long either a period here, or a comma and make it part of the next sentence. Personally, I think period. This is a great way to start the piece.

But then

time

slips between two pale sheets and beautiful image

nothing seems to bud. A sigh

tumbles out like a lazy butterfly. more beautiful imagery!

Rainy days have drawn themselves around me

like wet stockings. Since the next line begins with "and," I feel like it might flow better if you combined these two sentences, or just got rid of the "and" altogether.

And I wait,

as if counting down the days

with chalk

on a cement wall.

Fantastic last sentence! Honestly, I love this. It feels like a small puzzle missing pieces, and that's the way it should be. Beautiful, wistful imagery. Great write!