Lull

[RSaba]

Lull

The wolverine slept as the moon curdled,
and the pineapple closed its eyes and dreamt a maybe move the "a" to the next line, could flow better. Love this beginning by the way
Minotaur, in sorrow and joy, sending
a marble down a flat plane. The world "a marble down a flat plane" love that.
simmers with a haunted feeling that whorled
around some painted antler is an end
with our beginning pinned within it, fantastic line, love how that vowel sound flows through it
panting helplessly, matched, and on Forty-Forth correction: Forty-Fourth

and Main, I feel a light, banana-yellow, I really like how you're using different senses to describe things- ex. using "feel" to describe the light
warm, oily, and sweet. At six, the bell goes
rich, deep, patient. It can wait,
whatever's next again, and straightness,
I'll pretend, has no curl. Let's watch the day
end and think, say, the sun will never come up again.really great last line

All in all, I really enjoyed this! Weird and beautiful imagery. Not so sure about the sudden stanza break, but I do think it needs one somewhere- maybe after "It can wait," ?

Once again, beautiful.