04-18-2014, 06:32 PM
TS, I felt there was a bit too much white space in this short piece. I get the the long days stretching, but in may have been better to use the device in the opening and tighten up the the middle portion with all of the lovely bits and stretch out the end once more. I really like all the imagery packed into your poem. The sheets/bud/butterfly/stockings/chalk/cement were all great. Rainy days as wet stockings was my favorite, I immediately saw wet 'fishnet' stockings wrapped around your waist. Nice first post and looking forward to more./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris