04-18-2014, 12:25 PM
It was mentioned earlier, but be thorough with you/ya and the capitalization point is a good one. It is a mistake made by nearly every new poet, that with center aligning haha. The potential in this poem lies in the last stanza. And much like Mopkins said, the "treasured from afar" is a bit cheesy. That can easily be transformed into something more meaningful and descriptive. Great work and I look forward to reading more posts!