Funeral

[Stephanie]

Brilliant! Thank you both, your clarity is really helpful. I am going to have a good play around with that first section especially.

A quick play before the kids get up got me to this

We open the car window
but the air stays stale,
sticky as the ironed black
creasing with our hearts.

I loved the crease/crush suggestion, worried that the hearts might be a bit too cliched.