Babbling Old Fool

[Thoughtjotter]

Didn't read other crits due to my illness. Forgive if I repeat. Quick comments/



Babbling Old Fool (revision #1)

No ears to hear the babbling old fool,
self taught from his private well-read school.
Someone should embrace each humble word,
to miss any chance would be so absurd.

Speaking aloud to all those in range,
any marvelous phrase he may arrange.
Hoping to share to all who would see,
this infinite wisdom offered for free.

Freedom to speak has always been good,
never needing to be understood.
Though on occasion he might expect,
babbling old fools get a little respect.

Poetry is much harder than thought jotting.
Hope this is "more better" if not, I'll do it till I get it right.
As this may or might be an ongoing situation for the BOF, I'm not sure when to use may(present) or might(past)


WAYYY too much use of the word "babbling" in such a short poem.

End rhymes are sooooooo predictable.

I would give this "babbling fool" a name, or a philosopher (even a sardonic one)


In you comments in the end;
'more better' is Horrible grammar. Plus may (present) and might (past) is wrong, as well. Might had is past, but might is used frequently as present too.


Hope this helps!

Please pardon the late reply
Thank you for your feed back, looks as though I have a long way to go, I will go back and re edit.