Lover Under Construction

[tectak]

Thank you kindly Tom. Your critique, queries and recommendations may well be what I need to polish off this poem. Yes, the 'another' is a quandary. I left it open as to whether replacing one that left or building the ideal after previous failures. If confusing, it is better swept away, as it is probably superfluous to the poem. I like 'Vetruvian man, deformed' too. Somehow, most don't see the flaw in LDV's cadaver that was clearly 'club-footed' as the turned out leg reveals. I edited the first draft 'but' to that 'yet' just because of the 'but-but' in two consecutive stanzas, 'but' it can go back.

I will proceed with this next edit once I draft my NapM #15. This 30-day challenge is consuming every snippet, fragmented poetry, unfinished tome and future idea that I have on paper or in my head.

Most appreciative of your read and help, my poetic master and commander. /Chris

Creep.
tectak