04-16-2014, 08:31 AM
There are some nice images here, however the whole is a bit disjointed. The way it is written, it gives the reader little to grasp on to and care about, and this misstep at the end "like a broken toy, leaving nothing but the black and white space," so even if you had reeled them in with nostalgia, you would lose them there.
Best,
Dale
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.